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Literature-poems letters by Makona-Duke


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June 19, 2012
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I am the recipe
Of every mans envy
So any woman could have me
Yet I choose to abide
To stand by your side

Fingers bleed while I just try piecing it up
Fixing this love is like touching broken glass
I can't even bring myself to give you a hug
So why do I try when I know we'll never last
Getting back to my creative poetic side. Let me know what you think.
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JazzyMaybe Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Student General Artist
This is a sad story but very emotional. It pulls you in and makes sympathize. Very good work
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Death-By-Grunge Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012
Depressingly grim. Love isn't always happy...
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Dancergirl88 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
Fantastic!
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Zimario97 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree with earlier comments, the rhyme scheme is very cool. The word choice allows for clear, emotion-amplifying visuals.
I love it!!
Z97 Rating: :star::star::star::star::star:
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fractal2cry Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
u r my darkest fear u r always lurking!
the end is inevitable!
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JustAnotherNinja Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I don't feel like writing a critique now, so I'll just say that it's really great!!
I especially love the rhyme scheme :D
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