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Hey there abused and sitting in the corner
I'm here to fix this so don't feel like a loner
Here let me lift you up
Dust you off and give your wounds a cleanup
I'll punish him up for everything he's done to you
Just keep your head up and you'll pull through

From the darkest day to the coldest night
I'll take your beatings to set things right
I won't give up on you because for you I will fight
Even battered and bruised I'll give it all my might

Hey there cutter holding a piece of glass
Why is it always your wrists you harass?
You want to end it all as you hate your life
But salvation won't found at the end of a knife
Just give me time to fix this mess around you
So you can wake up to life with a positive view
  
From the darkest day to the coldest night
I'll cut and bleed for you to set things right
I won't give up on you because for you I will fight
Even bloodless and scared I'll give it all my might

Hey there addict looking for you next fix
Is there no hope for you even wearing that crucifix?
If God is taking a break from you I promise I won't
When you hunger and want to give in please don't
Let me be your daily dose
Take this itching craving and bring it to a close

From the darkest day to the coldest night
I'll be your sustenance to set things right
I won't give up on you because for you I will fight
Even fiending and addicted I'll give it all my might
Written by Mobis-New-Nest

These are other literature deviations I have done like the one above. Some are poems others are short stories, I also a guide to writing short stories for those who are new at writing:
Dan: [link]
Push: [link]
Pretend: [link]
Stand: [link]
Puppet: [link]
Fight: [link]
Endure: [link]

Following Wiespers: [link]

Pink Swear: [link]
In The Rain: [link]
Taken: [link]
Advice: [link]
Broken: [link]
Mobis Love StoryÖGAG: [link]
Damnation: [link]
Feelings: [link]
Ache: [link]
Sacrifice: [link]
Moms Car: [link]
Hate: [link]
Iím thinking Kingdom Hearts: [link]
Journey: [link]
Kingdom Bleach a dead fan fiction: [link]
The recipe that is you: [link]
My Angel in Red: [link]
In this corner versus life: [link]
Fiction Versus Reality: [link]
Gentile: [link]
Tragedy: [link]
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BlackBlockSwindle Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013   Artist
This was so beautiful...
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Why thank you. I really appreciate that.
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Sweet-Kaitou Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2011  Student Writer
Very nice and well written. :)
Do you know the artist for the little pic? owo
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Black---Diamond Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2010
Wow. Awesome.
You have a talent
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you, I try and step away from doing art work and really get down to literature pieces :)
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Black---Diamond Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
Good on you ^^
Its great :)
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longhorns-fan Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010
Wow, this is really good. Some great imagery, and if flows well. Great write. Almost sounds like it could be a song, or like a song could be written to go with it.
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you I'm glad you do, I don't really get a lot of comments on my literature pieces but I'm glad you like many others are recognizing my pieces. Peace love and so much happyness to you :)
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tomboy016 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
I love this poem. It describes everything I want.
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you I'm glad you do, I don't really get a lot of comments on my literature pieces but I'm glad you like many others are recognizing my pieces. Peace love and so much happyness to you :)
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tomboy016 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2010
No problem! I think you're an amazing writer!
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Iylene16 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you I'm glad you do, I don't really get a lot of comments on my literature pieces but I'm glad you like many others are recognizing my pieces. Peace love and so much happyness to you :)
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Iylene16 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010
aw it's really no problem, and thank you! you too! :hug:
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Schectera Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010  Student Photographer
I have to agree with all of the comments so far, the only thing that strikes me as odd is the timing, or the wording, rather. I don't think it flows as well as it should, but that may also be a part of getting the message across, so.
Once again, great work. ^.^ :)
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you I'm glad you do, I don't really get a lot of comments on my literature pieces but I'm glad you like many others are recognizing my pieces. Peace love and so much happyness to you :)
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bloosteel Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
This is very and truly amazing, I love how you incorporate the fact that you would be there for someone and show them that what they are doing is not a way to get by. I really love the rhythm you gave it even though it was dark but positive. You really are a great writer and artist! And your other piece, well I would have loved to leave a comment, well I'll do it here, I know what that girl has gone through. Enough said. But anyways, you really know how to show human emotion even if its for a second. Great work.
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you I'm glad you do, I don't really get a lot of comments on my literature pieces but I'm glad you like many others are recognizing my pieces. Peace love and so much happyness to you :)
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bloosteel Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2010
Your so very welcome for all the comments, although you don't have many comments, I am sure that I love all your pieces, because they show true emotions, and something uncensored and not all covered up by sweet words. I am the kind of person that tries to sugar coat things for those whom like sugar coating. But in real I just can't stand sugar coating, I just do it for others. Because actually no one really wants to know what goes on in my mind, its very uncensored in my head, so yeah, lol sugar coating. Lol But anyways, your so very welcome, glad I could help.
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Megakia Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010   Photographer
This is incredibly amazing.
Love it, really.
Dark but optimist in a way.
Congrats!
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you I'm glad you do, I don't really get a lot of comments on my literature pieces but I'm glad you like many others are recognizing my pieces. Peace love and so much happyness to you :)
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Megakia Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2010   Photographer
You're welcome, hope to read soon other pieces!
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Jessica-Edgely Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like how it was dark but sent a positive vibe throughout the piece. As if someone was there to help the abused, the cutter, and the addict.

This is exceptionally good writing. ♥ :thumbsup:
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you so much but I'm years from being an exceptional though I appreciate the comment and insight on my deviation non the less. It's amazing how inspiration can be drawn from real life scenarios. I have three people to thank for inspiring this piece.
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Jessica-Edgely Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, let's hope the inspiration to get better helps them with whatever.
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Pugzlee08 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
you are so talented
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
No no don't say that, I appreciate it but there are other individuals who are ten times better then me, hell I still make spelling mistakes :p but thank you I really appreciate you saying that :D
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punk-rock-brainwash Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2010
you should totally write a song to go with this
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Mobis-New-Nest Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010  Hobbyist Artist
Oh I wanted to but I decided it was just better left off as poem. Thanks for the comment much appreciated :D
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